Comment on Barıs',Tuba's,Helin's and Asena's Food Product Journal

Oh my dear friend Barış,
You cannot predict how hungry I am now and how much I want to eat some baklava. You chose one of the most important desserts of the Turkish cuisine. You wrote the ingredients and the recipe very clearly. Someone who have read the recipe and the ingredients can make baklava. Your slogan "SINCE ADAM AND EVA , EVERYBODY HAS EATEN TURKISH BAKLAVA" is also very attractive but it can be written better to keep the size of the sylabbles. However there are some points that I do not like. First of all, you did not write a paragraph. There is not coherence among parts. Secondly, you did not mention why you chose Latvia to market your baklava and lastly you did not mention the price of the product. Wtih this information, it can be better.